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Sylvie and Rick
Author: T Bone Steak
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(Added on Sep 21, 2005)
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Another couple story. It isn't so "direct" as my other stories. In this story, the male is in control. The story is fiction. |
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Average (?):  (5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Mar 20, 2008 |
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simple but good (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
powillie's
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Sep 26, 2005 |
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a little simple (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
H Dean
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Sep 21, 2005 |
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After the first offering by this author I had hoped for improvement. Unfortunaely, the grammar is quite poor. So poor, in fact, that it appears as if English is a second language. Consequently, if the story had flow it is halted, dramatically, by the constant mistakes. Further, poorly constructed and unrealistic dialogue plague this story to the point where completing it is most difficult. A proof reader is a must for this author as sentences like "The greened eyed woman honestly said. " and "She imagined to make love with a stranger. " are to be found in nearly every paragraph. In fact, the final paragraph ends with "She looked forward to explorer it more deeply. " I don't know how much a proof reader would improve these tales but, I imagine, it would go a long way in making them readable. (1/10)
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