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Family of Slaves
Author: Pallidan
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(Added on Aug 13, 2005)
(This month 66343 readers) (Total 86536 readers) |
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Linda comes home from college to find her mom and dad are now the neighbor slaves. |
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Average (?):  (6/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Engineer
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Aug 14, 2005 |
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Numerous errors in spelling, grammar and sentence construction make the story very hard to read. The plot is developing a little bit too fast, so it looks not very realistic. But story as well as author show potential for improvements. (4/10)
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| Reviewer:
Rocky
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Aug 13, 2005 |
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The author is making some progress, but the sentence structure is extremely awkward. Many run-ons, including the very first sentence in the story, severely detracted from what could have been an excellent read. I don't usually bother reading Pallidan's works, but didn't notice the author's name before I opened it. I would recommend that he start forwarding his stories to one of the numerous volunteer proofreaders available here. (5/10)
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mkemse
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Aug 13, 2005 |
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I hope you plan to add to this, if so i will adjust my review and rating at that time (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
slaveneedledick
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Aug 13, 2005 |
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Palliden is making progress in his writings. This another good start for a story. (7/10)
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