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Teen Black Domme
Author: Pallidan
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(Added on Jun 3, 2005)
(This month 64546 readers) (Total 83473 readers) |
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A young black girl dominates two white housewives in the neighborhood. |
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| Reviewer:
rebelfan1
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Aug 4, 2005 |
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Pallidan continues to post the same plot over and over again. His/her writing and gramatical skills are below a grammer school level. Please learn how to write or find someone to edit your stories. Otherwise, stop posting them because there actually get in the way of searching for good stories. (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
Dürrer
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Jun 13, 2005 |
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(8/10)
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| Reviewer:
Rocky
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Jun 6, 2005 |
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I disagree that the grammatical errors are small. Once again, a lack of proper puncutation {particularly quotation marks) detracts from what could have been a very good story. The sentence structure is a bit better than some of your other stories, but the tale is difficult to follow and doesn't flow quite right. (4/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Jun 6, 2005 |
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you are consistantly good (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
slaveneedledick
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Jun 4, 2005 |
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Some small grammatical errors but they could be overlooked as the plot was excellent. (7/10)
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