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The Cave
Author: Nist Shadow
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(Added on May 18, 2005)
(This month 54960 readers) (Total 70379 readers) |
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Maybe revisitng that cave was a bad idea, but at least it seem to be an interesting bad idea. |
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Average (?):  (8/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Kira
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Jun 20, 2005 |
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realy great story, i like the changeover from the selfbondage part to domination part. Specialy the permanent bondage with the rifets gun is a nice idea. Would be intersted what's coming next. (10/10)
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skullchaser
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Jun 2, 2005 |
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Nice start! I can't wait to see where you go with it, and what sort of tortures you dream up for the character to endure. You should break up the paragraphs a bit, rather than have large blocks of text. Otherwise, very imaginative beginning. (8/10)
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Zeferage
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May 30, 2005 |
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I agree with most of what the other reviews say, a very enjoyable story. More information on the characters would be nice. I do not understand why in the story codes 'feet' was marked. (8/10)
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DJ Tuk
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May 30, 2005 |
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Short and good. It would be nice if there was some more (9/10)
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jbowler65
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May 22, 2005 |
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This was a very enjoyable concept to (hopefully) a beginning of a longer story. However, it would be nice to have some more details, especially about the characters. (8/10)
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Mad Lews
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May 21, 2005 |
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An imaginative concept, fairly good descriptions of some relatively complex mechanisms, A bit more character development might be nice. And as you've already heard incessantly a proof reader would help. Carry on we await your next missive. (8/10)
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bracemaiden
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May 20, 2005 |
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I agree with the rest of the reviewers - there's a wonderful '10' rating story burried in there. Unfortunately, the grammar oops'es make it difficult to follow. I'ld suggest a proof-reader. (8/10)
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bobanddianne
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May 19, 2005 |
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A very nice and charming concept, we are eagerly looking forward to future developments (9/10)
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TzA
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May 18, 2005 |
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I enjoyed this story al lot, but it would be nice if you were al litte more descriptive and wrote more...
I hope there will be more chapters... (8/10)
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Grey Slayer
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May 18, 2005 |
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Very enjoyable. There were a few spelling/grammar errors, I very much liked this story. The concept just grabs my imagination. Please continue. (8/10)
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Dododecapod
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May 18, 2005 |
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A worthwhile start. Your writing is very sparse; in fact, a tad TOO sparse. It's like someone's notes, not a finished document.
That said, your imagery is good, and there sems to be the kernal of something really interesting here. If you can just remember your conjunctions and do a little self editing, the next chapter (I'm assuming there will be a next chapter, this ends abruptly) should be well worth reading. (5/10)
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praetorian
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May 18, 2005 |
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A nice start... now, let's see how it goes on (7/10)
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Engineer
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May 18, 2005 |
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A nice story. The idea is not quite new, but neatly developed, with a surprising twist in the end, and told in good taste, bringing a dense atmosphere. But a revision to eliminate certain stylistic and spelling flaws would improve readability.
(7/10)
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