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    | Reviewer: 
    Nitrofox
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    Oct 18, 2004 | 
   
   
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        Seriously unrealistic (Ruby's review) and not particularly enjoyable. More disgusting than anything else. (2/10) 
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    Dododecapod
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    Oct 16, 2004 | 
   
   
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        Adequate writing, but don't rely on a computer spellchecker - it doesn't get words that are correctly spelt but wrong in context. Definitely should have had the "Young" descriptor. Ah, the listing has "Young" in it now. Good. (7/10) 
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    | Reviewer: 
    Ruby
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    Oct 15, 2004 | 
   
   
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        Very hard to read with someone so young. It's almost fantasy, considering what they do to her a normal 10-year old can't take without a lot of phsycial damage. Please recode and add incest to your list. I agree with the earlier reviews. IMHO: If you want more readers,  change the age to 16. (5/10) 
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    | Reviewer: 
    MasterRJ
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    Oct 15, 2004 | 
   
   
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        Actually if you look on the update page it was labled as Young.  Now I have no idea why it wasn't labled as Young in the introduction, but buyer beware.  I mean, when the guys snuck into the room and started eyeing over Sherrie, you couldn't honestly thing her virginity would survive the night.  Actually I found this story very enjoyable.  Pretty similair to the Perils of Pauline at Christmas in some ways, except the kid survives, which is a plus in my book.  Well...sort of...the way you did the snuffing was...oddly erotic to me.  Hmm...I gave it an eight.  I rarely sit and read an entire story, but this one I couldn't put down. (8/10) 
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        - Replied by: 
bdsmbill
  (Edit)  (Oct 16, 2004)
 
        - The "young" label on the update page was added after most of these reviews were written.
 
        - Replied by: 
MasterRJ
  (Edit)  (Oct 16, 2004)
 
        - Never the less people are acting like they had no idea the girl would be raped.  It was clear to me from the second I read about the ten year old daughter she'd be raped.  I like to assume such intelligence is shared.  I like to think if you get offended so easily then perhaps BDSM and rape related erotic fiction isn't your bag...
 
        - Replied by: 
Alex Bragi
  (Edit)  (Oct 18, 2004)
 
        - Young?   You could use all kinds of euphemisms here, but it won't change what this is - it's purely paedophilia.  I feel it should be noted in the synopsis that this is a story for paedophiles.  Sorry, no rating from me, this isn’t my idea of an enjoyable, or erotic, read.
 
       
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    | Reviewer: 
    kayce
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    Oct 15, 2004 | 
   
   
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        when I sent it in I did put different codes and the word pedo its how Jinn sets it up and it was written for a pedo site. (5/10) 
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    chksng19
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    Oct 15, 2004 | 
   
   
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        No warnings means lost readers, and folks who might not trust next time. As with pippa and mkemse, I couldn't finish the story. Sneaking kiddie porn to people is not a good thing.  You do have some writing skills, though editing needs some help; lots of wrong words and misspellings. Several grammar concerns too. You seriously need to consider these things; perhaps fix the story, label it properly, and try again. (2/10) 
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    | Reviewer: 
    pippa
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    Oct 14, 2004 | 
   
   
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        I couldnt finish it as it made me feel sick. (1/10) 
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    mkemse
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    Oct 14, 2004 | 
   
   
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        i agree with bdsmbill (2/10) 
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    | Reviewer: 
    bdsmbill
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    Oct 14, 2004 | 
   
   
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        I am giving this story a very low rating, not because it was poorly written, but because the story codes do not warn the reader that it involves a 10 year old girl being raped.  I don't like being surprised by child porn.  If you change the codes, let me know and I will change the review. (1/10) 
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