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Author: T-Luv
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(Added on Mar 17, 2003)
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A story about two teenaged girl friends who can't manage to stay out of trouble. Steffy is a fairly innocent 14YO who always seems to get dragged into her 15YO friend, Mandy's, mischief. Of course, they always get caught, and get punished... |
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Average (?):  (5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Apr 26, 2005 |
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hoped for better but it was an ok read (5/10)
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mine to give
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Apr 18, 2003 |
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the story didn't seem to flow smoothly. i think more time describing the scenes and feelings involved might help. (4/10)
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| Reviewer:
miketop2003
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Mar 18, 2003 |
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As a spanking story this works quite well, some of the speech patterns are not those of real teenagers.
I thing the eroticism is nicely downplayed and would or could be explored further particularly the scene in the mall. (5/10)
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- Replied by:
T-Luv
(Edit) (Mar 18, 2003)
- Thanks for the comments!
I agree with your comment about speech patterns. Hard to make those completely realistic when I'm a 36YO male ;-)
This is a series I actually started many years ago, and this is the third incarnation. The first version wasn't especially well done, being early in my writing career, and was only about one and a half chapters. The second version was a complete rewrite, and I had written, I think, 10 or 11 chapters before I lost it all in a hard drive accident. (must... make... backups...) So I started all over again, as I really like this series. I have the next 14 chapters all planned out.
The story gets quite sexual later on, and we also discover that Mandy is no stranger to severe spankings. And Steffy is about to become more familiar with them...
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