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Afternoon Drive
Author: Finding_Fantasy
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(Added on Jan 16, 2003)
(This month 49968 readers) (Total 58134 readers) |
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A submissive and her dominant stop at an adult store while on an afternoon drive. Watch what happens as they try out some of the items they find. |
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Average (?):  (5/10) |
Average
Rating:  (4.5/10) |
Highest
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| Reviewer:
boccaccio2000g
(Edit) |
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Jan 26, 2003 |
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I *Thought* that was you two in the bookstore! I kept going back there every week for a year, hoping for an encore ... ;-)
Nice little story, FF -- anytime YouKnowWho is too busy or too tired to take you shopping, I'm sure you won't lack for volunteers!
As for the typo(s) -- I'm much more forgiving of an occasional typo (I'm guilty of my share) than sloppy writing or grammar. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
Finding_Fantasy
(Edit) (Jan 26, 2003)
- *lmao*!!! Well, I am glad that you liked it! Though I am sure that "YouKnowWho" Might have something to say about the other part!
Thanks for reviewing. :)
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| Reviewer:
Moggy
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Jan 24, 2003 |
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In such a short story, surely a little time spent proofreading wouldn't be too much to ask. e.g. The second paragraph
"We are searching for sometime when we find a short skirt with a matching halter that we seem to think that might looks some what "cute" on me so we ask the clerk if I can try it on. It made of leather and is the color of midnight black." (2/10)
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- Replied by:
Finding_Fantasy
(Edit) (Jan 24, 2003)
- Thanks for the review. I had considered actually taking the time to really write the story. However, it was written basically for one person and, as I surprise, he posted it up for me. :) Erotica isn't really my genre. Thanks for reviewing it at least.
- Replied by:
Moggy
(Edit) (Jan 24, 2003)
- Well, I knew Tourguide could be mean but...to post it without your having the chance to check it properly first! ;-) Sheesh!
You could always re-submit it if you get around to revising it.
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