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    Trouble
    
    Author: FuckDoll
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    (Added on Aug 15, 2002)
            (This month 52929 readers) (Total 68313 readers) | 
   
   
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    A girl, alone finds trouble at a bar as she meets two men who will take her (and keep her) as they please. | 
   
 
 
   
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    | Reviewer: 
    mkemse
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    Jul 31, 2005 | 
   
   
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        nice beginning and real good story (8/10) 
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    Jacen
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    Aug 19, 2002 | 
   
   
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        some grammar errors, and sentances like 'my ass and pussy were full.' and 'they fucked me forever' killed this quickly for me.  (4/10) 
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    | Reviewer: 
    CousinGoob
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    Aug 16, 2002 | 
   
   
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        I thought this story was very well written.  Something tells Me that many girls out there fantsize about this same thing happening to them. Don't you girls? (9/10) 
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    | Reviewer: 
    boccaccio2000g
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    Aug 15, 2002 | 
   
   
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        Good intensity; not badly written (too many multi-speaker paragraphs, though). The story line is not very original.   This author appears to have a decent command of style, but needs to work on characterization.  I see potential though (5/10) 
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